Luck's Goodwill

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Ok this is my first story so it'll probably be lame. Anyone familiar with the WH40k game necromunda or the film judge dredd, or any other futurisits gang warfare settings it's similiar setting to that.

[Edited away due to my intent to submit a rewrite to various magazines (which almost unwaveringly wish for pieces to be unavailable elsewhere). If anyone wishes to read/re-read this piece then email/pm me and I will gladly send it.]

[ July 02, 2004, 20:21: Message edited by: Lazy Bonzo ]

 

Keep on posting

 

Thanks Uytuun.

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[ July 02, 2004, 20:24: Message edited by: Lazy Bonzo ]

 

Pretty good. Havn't seen stuff like this on SP before.

 

i like it, makes a change from swords & stuff.

 

Very good story

 

Ok decided to add some more to the story. So i wrote this rather than doing my physics homework, it was eaiser lol.

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[ July 02, 2004, 20:23: Message edited by: Lazy Bonzo ]

 

That's good

 

Ok concluding part because i probably won't write any more for a couple of months.

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[ July 02, 2004, 20:23: Message edited by: Lazy Bonzo ]

 

lol. Very nice end, Lazy.

Do write more after that couple of months.

 

Written some more (since it's the half term hols so know school for a week)

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[ July 02, 2004, 20:23: Message edited by: Lazy Bonzo ]

 

Pretty good, though may e you shouldn't use brackets as much. Just a thought

 

Thanks for the comment on the brackets, i'd thought the same when i wrote it but couldnt see how to get round the use of them (i now have done so) but needed someone elses opinion on it.

Also does anyone happen to know if there is already a starship, planet, person, city or whatever called Tera-Nova in any other book,film,or other media form? I ask because i have a nagging feeling that i've heard it before although this could just be because i just took two words Terra (earth?) and Nova (new or now? i think) that i had heard at some point in my life.

 

There is an old computer game called Terra Nova. And Nova is latin for new.

 

2 things, firstly i changed the title to Luck's Goodwill. Secondly i have had these next to chapters ready for a while but didn't post them as i had planned to finish this story some day, however i have abandoned it but feel that i should post the rest here anyway. The end part with Gorn and Namak makes little sense because i have abandonded this story. They were basically going to simply be a safe haven for Jareg, for awhile.

Ok the concluding chapters (unless for some strange reason i come back to this story).

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[ July 02, 2004, 20:24: Message edited by: Lazy Bonzo ]

 

I enjoyed that. I'm glad you managed to round it off, but still leave a way to continue,

 

Grr, I want more dammit! Though I'm not likely to get more I can still yell and scream at you in the vain hope that you will write some more

 

Though i had planned not to continue this story i did still leave the end open. I now have an idea for a continuation, though each will actually be almost seperate stories in themselves, no definite link. It will be set in the Namak system, on Gorn or some other planet in the system (and yes i do make up the planet/system names as i go, it's not really relevant to the story). It will be set at least a year in the future, after Jareg has become accepted on Gorn. The plot however i'm not going to reveal at this point. I intend to start work on this over the next few days and will post as soon as i've got the first part done.

 

Gorn, isn't that a comic book character?

 

Err not that i know of. Perhaps though. Which Comic?

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Ok i have the first part of the next Jareg story up -

Careless but not Heartless

Please read and comment.

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